Discussion and Reply

Discussion and Reply

Discussionand Reply

Discussionand Reply


Onpage P69, the professor tells Mr. Auteri to improve his table ofcontents. He comments and says that the heading should be parallel.By this, he means the heading should be standardised. This is to makethe document more appealing to the reader, as well to enhance thereadability of the document.


Theexecutive summary can be rewritten as, “For over fifty years,Standard Steel has been a worldwide manufacturer of speciality steelforgings. The company need to have accurate temperature monitors tomaintain its high level of quality and competitiveness. Inaccuraciesin monitoring the temperature of steel moulding and forming may causedefects due to expansion and contraction of the material. Of course,this leadsto poor quality of the final product. There are several ways tohandle this problem. These include the current methods of monitoringtemperature at Standard Steel, conventional optical pyrometers, andthe use of thermocouples. Additionally, optical thermometers shouldbe introduced to the industry.”


Theprofessor asks Mr. Auteri to “beef up” the first paragraph of hisexecutive paragraph. An executive summary is the overview of thewhole report. It should identify the report’s objective,methodology, results, conclusions, as well as recommendations(Dragga,1992).This is unlike the Auteri executive summary. From my perspective, theinstructor is asking for more content.


Inpage 72, the professor advises Mr. Ateuri to avoid using first person“you” in the formal reports. He comments this in the sentence “ineach description you will find ……..” Additionally, theprofessor also comments that a colon (:) should be used before a listand not a semi-colon ().


Overall,the purpose of this analytical report was to analyse the accuracy,efficiency, and feasibility of optical thermometer. Besides, thereport wants to find out if optical thermometers are the bestsolution to the Standard Steel Problem. It applies rhetoricalpatterns whereby it addresses one product at a time.


Dragga,S. (1992). Technical Writing Student Samples and Teacher Responses.